Trails of Travel

vapor trails of travelHow many people, I wonder, have passed through the skies above us this morning? Where were they headed, what were their stories? How little thought we give to the tens of thousands of people who hurtle through the atmosphere every day … until something unfortunate happens. Then, for a moment, we think of the travelers, fear air travel, decry the industry.

For a moment.

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Crafting Conflict In Your Stories

Crisis Ahead, conflictAny writer knows that conflict is necessary in a story to keep a reader engaged. But what is conflict and how is it created, met, and overcome? The answers to these questions have a lot to do with how well received your stories will be.

What Conflict Is Not

Violence. Crafting blood-spattered scenes of opposing forces (could be armies or individuals) battling one another is not conflict. Violence is the progeny of the conflict. Why are they battling? That is the conflict. And there has to be some specificity to it, not just “This army seeks to take over that army’s kingdom”. Why do they want to take over and how is this pertinent to your POV characters?

The same goes for arguments, personal rivalries, and social “shoving around”. A scene may be set around an argument between two characters or a school kid being bullied by classmates, but the fact that your characters are upset is not conflict. Why are they upset? What is the root of the trouble, not its outcome. That is your conflict. Continue reading “Crafting Conflict In Your Stories”

Fellowship: What it Really Means

fellowshipOnce a month the church I attend has a Dinner On The Ground Indoors – what other churches I’ve been part of would call a Fellowship Dinner.

In most churches these dinners were a time to chat and share a good meal. That’s what fellowship is, right? Visiting?

A dictionary defines it as:

NOUN

  1. friendly association, especially with people who share one’s interests:
    “they valued fun and good fellowship as the cement of the community”
    synonyms: companionship · companionability · sociability
  2. the status of a fellow of a college or society:
    “she held the Faulkner fellowship”

Definitions provided by Oxford Dictionaries

Which of these, if either, is closest to the fellowship the Bible encourages us to engage in? Let’s see what the Bible has to say about this topic. Continue reading “Fellowship: What it Really Means”

The Dos and Don’ts of Dialogue

dialogueDialogue is the heartbeat of any fiction novel. An author can use the verbal interaction between characters (or a character with itself) to flesh out those characters, build suspense, explain elements of the story, bring in back-story, and entertain the reader … if it’s done right.

Dialogue Dos

Do base your characters on people you know (or know of: like movie stars). If you want to be the inspiration for the hero or heroine, that’s fine; as long as you have (or can create) the needed heroic qualities.

Do use dialog to bring clarity to your story: reveal facets of your character, explain plot history or setting, and build emotion in a scene. Using dialogue for these is much better than blocks of expository text; which tend to get boring quickly.

You can also accomplish multiple purposes through the use of dialogue. For instance; an argument between your protagonist and another major character can reveal character facets like temperament, education, and the motivations of both characters. Brief insertions of actions (she flipped her long, blond hair out of her eyes, then continued…) can also accomplish describing your character more efficiently than some long gaze in a mirror.

Do allow your characters to express themselves naturally. Their speech is part of their personality.

Do keep a log of each characters pet phrases and speech idiosyncrasies.

Do practice dialogue with each character. As a writing exercise, set up a scene with the character of the moment and let them speak. Your characters will develop as you become familiar with them. Letting them build in your mind through practice dialogue will save you having to re-write previous scenes because your character changed

Dialogue Don’ts

Don’t insist on formal grammar and sentence structure. Few people actually speak like a formally written document. Maybe when giving a speech, but not in conversation. Use natural language.

Don’t include boring details of a long conversation. People do sit around and chat about the weather and politics, but unless these are directly relevant to the story or used in some meaningful way, cut away from the scene with a statement like, “They discussed the weather for a while”. Leave out the fluff and avoid miring the pace of your story.

Don’t change POV during a discussion. If you want to reveal the thoughts of the non POV character, these need to be revealed by subtle action and being recognized by the POV character. “Susan saw anger in Michael’s eyes though his voice remained calm and measured.”

Don’t let your dialogue get trite of stiff. You destroy the believability of your character when their interaction degrades in this way. If you feel it getting trite, go back and study your characters real-life model a bit more and see how the would handle the dialogue in question.

Don’t copy anyone so precisely that you get sued for basing your villain on some well known politician. Base your character, don’t make them a copy of.

Don’t over-use dialogue tags: said, replied, asked, etc. Use these for the first couple of rounds in a conversation to distinguish who is speaking, but unless you’ve got a crowd of people interacting all at once, let the conversation flow naturally.

Don’t use adverbs in language tags at all. Instead of ““What do you mean by that?” Angela asked angrily” use ““What do you mean by that?” Angela’s eyes flashed with anger.”

Show, Don’t Tell

An old writing axiom tells us to show the reader what is going on, don’t describe it to them. Dialogue is a great way to do this. It can be entertaining, informative, and revealing all at once.

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Who Is This Man?

who is this manJesus and his disciples are crossing the sea of Galilee when the waves and wind rise up against them in a storm. The disciples ask Jesus to save them, he calms the sea with words, and these men are amazed. They ask one another, “Who is this man, that even the winds and the sea obey Him?” (Matt 8:27)

At the beginning of Jesus’ ministry, he selected 12 men who were his inner circle. They were His helpers, they were His students, they would become His apostles: traveling their world to spread His gospel. But their realization of who He is came slowly.

By the time we get to the events of Matthew 8, Jesus has been traveling the region with his disciples for some time. He has healed many people – probably many hundreds of people – of all manner of sicknesses. He has cast out demons. He has worked miracles. These men have been right there and seen it all. And yet, after all they have witnessed, these men, of all men, don’t know ” who is this man “!

But, we look at these men from the perspective of a modern day Christian, having access to a complete Bible. We must remember that these men held a different viewpoint. Continue reading “Who Is This Man?”

Winner!

I received the following e-mail from my editor concerning a writer’s contest I’d entered at a magazine I write for.  Reminder: my pen name is Allan Douglas.   I’m feeling pretty happy right now.

Good afternoon!

Happy to report, our blogger contest for July was a huge success and something we hope to repeat in the near future — we’re currently looking for more awesome prizes for the next one. Thanks to ECHO for donating two quality saws that we know suit our audience well, a couple of CS-590 TimberWolf chainsaws (valued at $399).

The winner of most unique pageviews on a post: Allan Douglas, author of “How to Grow and Use Elderberry Plants,” which garnered 3,098 unique pageviews in the month of July — actually the post performed that well in 1/3 of the month, since it was published on 7/20/16!

The winner of most posts in the month of July: April Freeman, with a whopping 21 posts!

Way to go, Allan and April, and thanks to all of our bloggers who continually offer their country-living insights to like-minded neighbors. We will do our best to bring you opportunities for more cash and prizes in the future.

Allan and April, we’ll be in touch shortly to set up shipping information for your cash prize as well as your new Echo CS-590 TimberWolf chainsaw, just in time for fall!

All the best,

Caleb Regan

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Bernie’s Encounter

He stood, transfixed, heart pounding, staring up at where the man-creature disappeared as four of the men in dark suits split up and ran to surround the building.  Two others approached him.

man_in_black-114061“’Scuse me son, we need to talk to you about what just happened here.” said the big one.

“Talk … me?” Their arrival had barely registered on his conscious mind before.  Now, distracted from his wonder and terror he looked them over and his heart sank.  Before him stood two men; early middle age, muscular, clean shaven, short hair.  Each was wearing a well tailored suit; black, white shirt, black tie.  And sunglasses; why always the sun glasses?  One held out a wallet displaying a badge and government-issue ID.

“We’re …” Continue reading “Bernie’s Encounter”

The Discipline of God

I often hear people ask, “Why is God punishing me?” because they have fallen into hardship. It saddens me to hear this.  God is not a heavy handed tyrant doling out discipline without reason.

disciplineHebrews chapter 12 talks about the discipline of God: in it Paul compares our relationship with God to that of a human father and child. He asks: what father who loves his son does not discipline him? What is he asking?

While there is a modern trend of “Never say ‘no’ to your child” which believes that correcting a child’s bad behavior will damage their psyche – I say that’s hogwash. Ever since humans walked the Earth we have known that children need guidance to learn what is right, what is wrong, and to have respect for their parents and teachers. While I do not advocate beating a child, discipline, guidance, correction must be carried out.

If I, the son of a human father, recognize that my father was molding me as a child, not persecuting me, how can I shake a fist at God when I am being disciplined? Continue reading “The Discipline of God”

Avoiding ‘ Very ‘ In Your Your Writing

In a society that increasingly regards anything smacking of ‘rules’ or ‘procedure’ as unfairly restrictive, things like punctuation, grammar, and spelling are rapidly falling out of favor. If you are one who lauds this movement, feel free to scroll on now: you won’t enjoy this article. If, however, you are one who still feels that language is beautiful and powerful, continue as I denounce the word “ very ” and offer alternatives to it’s use.

Why Avoid ‘Very’

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Fascinating?

Very is laziness. It cheapens your work. We tend to add ‘very’ as a modifier to another word to heighten it’s meaning, but in doing so we lose the opportunity to make a much better statement. We might say, “The building is very large.” but saying, “The building is enormous.” conveys your thought so much better.

I offer validation on the topic from famous authors:

‘Very’ is the most useless word in the English language and can always come out. More than useless, it is treacherous because it invariably weakens what it is intended to strengthen. ~Florence King

Substitute ‘damn’ every time you’re inclined to write ‘very;’ your editor will delete it and the writing will be just as it should be. ~Mark Twain Continue reading “Avoiding ‘ Very ‘ In Your Your Writing”

God: Yes, Jesus: No

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Jesus the Risen Lord

There is a marked tendency to push all mention of Christianity out of the public forum. Where praise or prayer is still allowed, most insist that the addressed deity be confined to “God”. The name of Jesus is pointedly excluded. Why?

God is generic. Anyone who believes in a god can mentally substitute their own deity into a prayer or giving of thanks, even some discussions – as long as definitive names such as Elohim or Jehovah are avoided. Those who deny the existence of ANY god will be offended in any case. Continue reading “God: Yes, Jesus: No”